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March 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heyyy! I\'m liking this, it\'s pretty good. I like the plotline so far and the concept\'s really interesting. Hopefully Rei\'s scars will be healed and I\'d like to see what happens with Tala and Bryan...hehe it\'s cute that they don\'t even know each other yet, yet they\'re gonna be set up-well we can only hope. :) Update quick!
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March 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You really should update this story, it\'s really good. I like it alot and it\'s very original! I hope that you decide to finish is someday.
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January 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Once again you\'ve come up with a great I idea. I admire you. I mean you have this great idea, plot and a story and writing that keeps me glued to the screen. I just wish that you hadn\'t stopped writing it! Please continue with this, I\'m begging you!
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December 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is great! Please Update!
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November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is great so far!! Please Update really really soon!!!!!!!!!!
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November 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Really great story. First I didn't want to read it but after I tried the first chapter I became addiccted....MORE PLEASE!!!!
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October 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
continue writing. It's a good story
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August 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is the kind of creative idea that makes me wish I'd had it. >_o It's sheer brilliance. There are a few mistakes here and there, especially around the beginning; it cleans up at about the middle and towards the end, though, so good job. =D
I love your realistic setting; it doesn't look ovee ore or contrived, and flows quite well, what with the camel herds and the scar system and . Ma. Maybe you should have described the scars more, though, as there was no mention of them on Tala or Kai.
"Kai rose to his feet, ignoring the spread(ing) stain on the hideously expensive rug and stomped to his tent flap." -> I love your expression here, "hideously expensive". Gives me the mental image of an angry, broom-wielding servant woman screaming at Kai for ruining the carpet. :3
I hope Rei's scars heal right! Though it would make a rather nice plot twist if they didn't... >=D *evil*
Off to read the next chapter,
~Arach
I love your realistic setting; it doesn't look ovee ore or contrived, and flows quite well, what with the camel herds and the scar system and . Ma. Maybe you should have described the scars more, though, as there was no mention of them on Tala or Kai.
"Kai rose to his feet, ignoring the spread(ing) stain on the hideously expensive rug and stomped to his tent flap." -> I love your expression here, "hideously expensive". Gives me the mental image of an angry, broom-wielding servant woman screaming at Kai for ruining the carpet. :3
I hope Rei's scars heal right! Though it would make a rather nice plot twist if they didn't... >=D *evil*
Off to read the next chapter,
~Arach
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August 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story so far. I hope I don't have to wait too long for an update.
I just hope Tala will be alright. I know how painful it can get when you fall of a horse and hit your head.
Update soon ok and keep on writing more great stories like this one.
I just hope Tala will be alright. I know how painful it can get when you fall of a horse and hit your head.
Update soon ok and keep on writing more great stories like this one.