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for Broken

by Twitch

schedule April 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
the first chapter was pretty good but the second seemed well...rushed. I figure it would take Yzak a while to get close to anyone (even Dearka sadly) after what Kreuze did to him. I think you should maybe squeeze a chapter or 2 in the middle of the rape scene and the lemon so that Yzak has time to soften up to Dearka again (and encounters Kreuze maybe while Yzak suspects)

but that is just my opinion. Just trying to help ^^
person Lucien
schedule July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So... so beautiful.
person Fantasy
schedule April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE do another chapter, JUST ONE MOOORRREEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person DarkMoonInShadow
schedule March 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YZAK! AH MY YZAK!
T_T *tears flowing quickly* Such an awesome fic!
YZAK!
Write more soon.
YZAK!!!!! NOOOO!
lol im a wierdo so lol ignore my screaming.
Later days
person Releasemeok
schedule March 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
really really good congrats do another story
person nutmeg
schedule February 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god...I could have cried...it was so cruel, but so amazing. Excellent.
person Mitsuki
schedule January 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please continue! I want to see what happens when Deakka talks to Yzak, and what will happen to poor Yzak... but this fic was really good! Please write more soon!
person Princess of the Cosmos
schedule January 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I adore this story. I first read it on MM.org and now it\'s here. :) Keep up the good work and update soon.

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