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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hiyas! I just wanted to make another sugestion. I\'m into the whole \'female dominance\' thing, so how about some kind of Ed bondage thing?X3 That would be hott!! Oooo, Ed all tied up and stuff...with Winry to do what she wants with him...that turns me on:D And then you could do the opposite with Winry being the one in bondage!o^-^o
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OO! Hell ya! This was good! Okay....about the survey...hmm...well, nothing turns me off exactly. OO, I know one, I hate obscure name for male/female genitals. Once I came upon this horrible \"lemon\" and they used words like \"birdie\" for the penis. That just totally killed it. Another thing, it’s one thing if you put a song before or AFTER the lemon, but DONT put it in the middle of the sex scene! MAJOR MOMENT KILLER!
Okay, now for what I like! Rough treatment to the lips is awesome, I love kissing scenes or anything to do with lips so yeah, put those lips to use! Oo, I agree with many others. A dominatrix Ed is major hotness and with him being rough like that....GOSH I ENVY WINRY! I like it when it’s rough but also when the guy is still concerned for the girl\'s pleasure. You should make them try different positions: 69, anal, oral....all that dirty stuff ;p. And now dirty talk....here’s one example I like: \"Would you like me on top?\" \"Of course....I want to see them bounce.\" Ooohh yeah, that’s what I like, whispers of encouragement or yelling out in ecstasy.
You wanted an obscure place right? IF ONLY PLANES EXISTED IN THE SERIES! I woulda said a bathroom in a plane. Damn, okay how about along a river bank or IN a river/lake. Or to sum it all up, sex in the water: bath tub, pool, lake, river, OCEAN! Whatever, just sex anywhere!
Okay, now for what I like! Rough treatment to the lips is awesome, I love kissing scenes or anything to do with lips so yeah, put those lips to use! Oo, I agree with many others. A dominatrix Ed is major hotness and with him being rough like that....GOSH I ENVY WINRY! I like it when it’s rough but also when the guy is still concerned for the girl\'s pleasure. You should make them try different positions: 69, anal, oral....all that dirty stuff ;p. And now dirty talk....here’s one example I like: \"Would you like me on top?\" \"Of course....I want to see them bounce.\" Ooohh yeah, that’s what I like, whispers of encouragement or yelling out in ecstasy.
You wanted an obscure place right? IF ONLY PLANES EXISTED IN THE SERIES! I woulda said a bathroom in a plane. Damn, okay how about along a river bank or IN a river/lake. Or to sum it all up, sex in the water: bath tub, pool, lake, river, OCEAN! Whatever, just sex anywhere!
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
in public?!?!? WHEEE!!! i\'m on this boat and you will not get me off for love or money! (maybe for a sexy, rich and stupid man who wants to tie the knot- but nothing else.) what phrases turn me off: \'big boy\', \'baby\' and \'whose your daddy??\'. bleah!! creepy and trite. also, describing the penis as \'man meat\' or \'sixteen inch cock!!!!\' (does not exist. urban myth of idiot birth) are all really gross. I guess I like a more lyrical phrasing of limbs. in certain places, \'wood\' is okay but only in certain contexts. Words for female genetalia are very tricky in my opinion. stuff like \'pussy\', \'cunt\' or \'sopping wet hole\' just really don\'t do it for me. It all depends on whether a word fits into context: for example, if in this story ed yelled out something like \"ooooh, yeah baby! What a cunt!! dripping wet pussy!!!\"- please. spare me.
however, i adore dirty language during sex. i think it\'s just the right amount of kinkiness. it just has to be tastefully dirty. this story was extremely tastefully dirty and i ADORED it. fabulous job on this! the descriptions, the talking, the actions and just about everything was damn perfect.
however, i adore dirty language during sex. i think it\'s just the right amount of kinkiness. it just has to be tastefully dirty. this story was extremely tastefully dirty and i ADORED it. fabulous job on this! the descriptions, the talking, the actions and just about everything was damn perfect.
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Finally, someone who supports het parings in FMA! I love EdWin stories, the bestfriends to more is a guilty pleasure of mine. First off Loved the fic. I have been on a mad hunt for EdWin fics and you are one of my fav authors (also one of the few) to write decent EW stories, and for that you deserve a pat on the back.
Something I hate in fanfics are songs, a few lines to a song is ok, but when people want to write out the full song and do that every chapter I tend to stop reading. Also it\'s really annoying when the author breaks the story for their own little commentary that really has nothing to do with the fic. Another thing I hate is the childish attempts at cliffhangers
e.g. And as she ran through the dark terrifying forest she collided with none other than..... HA HA HA don\'t you just love that! God I really truly hate that.
Something that I think would be interesting to read in \'The Sexual Adventures of Edward and Winry \' is a dominate Ed. We all know Ed is a take charge guy, and I don\'t see why he wouldn\'t at least attempt to get dominate/rough in the bedroom. Another thing I can really see, is Ed and Winry engaging in some dirty tal (wink wink)
Once again great fic, and can\'t wait to read more.
Something I hate in fanfics are songs, a few lines to a song is ok, but when people want to write out the full song and do that every chapter I tend to stop reading. Also it\'s really annoying when the author breaks the story for their own little commentary that really has nothing to do with the fic. Another thing I hate is the childish attempts at cliffhangers
e.g. And as she ran through the dark terrifying forest she collided with none other than..... HA HA HA don\'t you just love that! God I really truly hate that.
Something that I think would be interesting to read in \'The Sexual Adventures of Edward and Winry \' is a dominate Ed. We all know Ed is a take charge guy, and I don\'t see why he wouldn\'t at least attempt to get dominate/rough in the bedroom. Another thing I can really see, is Ed and Winry engaging in some dirty tal (wink wink)
Once again great fic, and can\'t wait to read more.
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
EDWIN FOREVER!
I\'d like to see Winry make Ed \'feel better\' after being hurt, Nurse Winry anyone?
I\'d like to see Winry make Ed \'feel better\' after being hurt, Nurse Winry anyone?
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another wonderful Winry x Ed story! I like the way you write your stories, but I think you could do a little more foreplay. Yeah, definately more oral stuff=P
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a cute story. Please continue. Ed and Winry forever.
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm...first off, I LOVE the story. FINALLY!! SOME MORE ED AND WIN SEX!! Not that I\'m against yaoi...just, we need more Ed and Win. Anyways. Story was good. I loved it. Man, I want to be Winry in this story!!
In response to your survey thingy, I think the phrase \"i\'m coming\" its...too general. Too many people use it! I think the best way to fill that is just to have them scream. \"I\'m coming\" Kind of kills the whole romance part of the fic. Maybe something like \"I think I\'m going to explode\" Would be better? No clue...but...yeah. VERY VERY Good fic otherwise!!
In response to your survey thingy, I think the phrase \"i\'m coming\" its...too general. Too many people use it! I think the best way to fill that is just to have them scream. \"I\'m coming\" Kind of kills the whole romance part of the fic. Maybe something like \"I think I\'m going to explode\" Would be better? No clue...but...yeah. VERY VERY Good fic otherwise!!