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This story sounds great :)

Yes, an update! I was so excited to see another chapter, and after finished reading it I'm still celebrating. You covered a lot in this chapter and I enjoyed all of it! I really like Turles and Nappa together, and I'm really curious about any complications about Bardock might come up. The descriptions of saiyans and how Kakarrot feels their ki and how the security and surveillance teams worked was brilliant and real.
I am of course now extremely nervous about this 'claiming' business. Were they speaking in a different language than on Earth, anyway? I get the feeling there's a misunderstanding about what Kakarrot wants, but I hate the thought of it dragging on for weeks and him feeling horrible and just not understanding. Please don't do that! Even if it's cleared up, Vejita is still prideful and angry enough at the decision made for him to cause some fun problems, and a decade of feelings he's worked up don't just disappear with an explanation of a mistake.

Ah, I don't want Kakarrot to be in pain! (emotional pain, feel free to start some fights). At least let there be some good times in between if we're goin to put him through a lot! Please?

Great chapter. Can't wait for the next one!

You are a genius- at world building, description, pacing, and creating an engaging premise. I love a story more from this series than I would have anticipated at my age - (Late twenties) - all because of your writing ability. Thank you!

This is beautifully written. The idea is believable and innovative. It's a truly captivating read. Thank you for writing this! I can't wait for more!

Hi, B here.
Wow, can't believe it, an oldie with a newbie fic. God, I really miss the old school way of fic writing. Seems like so many fics are so cookie cutter now; been awhile since I read a fic that got me thinking. It’s actually inspired me to do a little writing myself, so thanks for the creative boost, B really needed it.
I'm defiantly enjoying this one so far. I love your take on saiyan culture there’s just something so fascinating about the way you’re portraying them. Primitive, yet beautiful and cultured, nothing like ‘sacrifice the virgins to appease our god’. Although… that is ‘kind’ of happening. Still it’s Vegeta so who can blame them. The offering of gifts just seems so refined in a manner; Zen as to the barbaric nature some people portrays saiyan society. Still like the kinky biting and fight for dominance, but I like a little more culture then me ‘strong you weak’.
I’m also loving the use of henna tattoos, like the ones Vegeta’s father painted on him. That appeals to my artist side. The little details like Vegeta’s father having an artist flair, make the characters more real and likable. I love that Vegeta has a big loving family in this and yet he’s still the same violent ill temper spit fire we all love. You’ve managed to keep his personality very close to what I think Akira was intending.
Goku’s thoughts are also deep and sorrowful. The past you describe is pretty horrifying. Vegeta severing his son’s arm to save him, this ‘Death’ killing everything. Goku going back again and again and never able to save earth. Him watching Vegeta die over and over. Vegeta telling and yet not explaining about their bond. Poor guy has a lot on his plate. That part about him telling Bulma Vegeta didn’t really love her in one time, wicket. Especially, with her drunk and crying over him. Blunt and cruel. I can see him tired of fighting a losing battle and wanting to be selfish, to escape to something better.
You have my attention, I’m defiantly keeping an eye out for more of this fic.
Ja ne
b-chan

The second chapter is sweet and sad my heart is following kakarotto's thought. It is so sad Vejita in the other world died that way without being able to reveal his true feelings. The description of the other world is very sorrowful, I felt so bad. comparing to that the current vegetasai is like opening a new book. I wish a happy and loving life in this timeline, althoug it seems there will be some obstables beofre that coming.

I love the way you describe Vegetasai, make me like this planet very much and eager to see what is going to happen in this world. Details like the eating flowers are so fun.

Kakarotto had been brew and planned this for a long time. I am as axious as him wish to see how this turn out.

All in all a good revealing chapter, solved a lot mistories and preparing for more. Please update soon!!

Lol I thought I was on Facebook for a moment I was looking for the like button. But this story is Amazing. I almost didn't read it because the formatting threw me off but I'm really glad I did. It's hard to find good fanfiction and wow. This is great.

I love the world you've created in this fic. It's beautiful. And the characters.......Please continue this!

I realize Goku's been through a lot and so is more mature and not as concerned with acting like a hero, but I was a little worried at first he'd be too different. I like the idea of him growing closer to his saiyan heritage and ideas, but I hope he doesn't take Vegeta for granted after he's taken such overbearing control over the situation and Vegeta's worries from the first chapter. I still like your ideas and descriptions of Vegeta, and I can't wait to see how the two of them react to each other. Lots of emotion in this chapter, and that plan growing near his window being soemthing that fits planet Vegeta is a perfect touch!

Great story, I always love ones written by you :)

I loved the explanation of how Goku is now Kakarot and what happened to Earth/Vegeta, though it was sad. I wonder how different Vegeta will be without his experiences with Freiza and will he accept Kakarot.

Can't wait for more.