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I'm intriguing

everything about this story is amazing. I look forward to reading more.

Can't wait to read more. This seems like it's off to an excellent start.

I like it, it's promising

I am a huge fan of your stories, Xero Sky,and I'm really excited about this one! I love how you describe Vegeta, and this chapter had a lot of detail on him as well as stuff about how the saiyan race accepted the Legendary and lived without Freeza. You've got such a way of bringing texture to the scenes, from Vegeta's well-known pride and resolution and anger in this new version, growing up knowing he isn't a match for Goku and that he was being given away, to the unexpected detail of the stain used on Vegeta's skin as part of the ritual of getting ready and the King's interest as an artist. Great job!

I'm already intrigued in this story. Vegeta's character and fierce determination shine through in every line, and I loved the sublte insights into saiyans in general and his father's thoughts and behavior. I am incredibly curious about Kakarrot's intentions, and how he'd react to the statues and sacrifices in his honor now, and how he'll approach Vegeta. Claiming sounds fascinating, and the dark history of it Vegeta discovered was menacing warning. Despite how Vegeta feels he's being sold to Kakarrot to be lesser, controlled, Kakarrot's words about ruling belonging to the House of Vegeta and how he is a defender almost makes him sound like he would support and be under Vegeta's rule... But I'm not sure and there feel like so many options, especially if Vegeta treats Kakarrot like an enemy first. And why would Kakarrot want Vegeta? The hints of time-travel make it even more confusing, and I want to know!

Smaller question, I wonder how much older than Vegeta Kakarrot is? Did he really wait twelve years, or did it only take a few days with his time machine?

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter, and how Vegeta and Kakarrot will meet! Please update soon!

Hi!

Great beginning!

You described Vegeta's struggles and fears very good. I could really feel with him.

Please do go on!

I really like how this story started off. Very nice writing how you described Vegeta's emotions and I can't wait to
read how he handel Kakkarot.

Oh my god! Xero sky is writing. I am so happy. Why the fandom is quiet for a bit then there are several good stories on. Not I am complaining. No, no.
I love the story. You have a beautiful start. The scenes are vivid in mind and I love the way you described saiyanjin ceremonies, combine both morden and history. Love the tattoo and the royal family interaction, so nice and real. But I love most vegeta,s monologue.it is so vegeta! It is beautifully deep and comprehensive. It shows the conflicts inside. I can't wait for him to meet kakarott to see what happens. The suspension is killing me!
It seems the future kakarott came to this timeline to save the day. But what about the other vegeta? You can't have both kakarott, that is too greedy of you. I can't wait to see the update.

O.O!

Do my eyes deceive me?? Is the great Xero Sky posting DBZ fics again?! OH JOY! Oh, I've missed you in this fandom! I'm not big on Vegeta being an uke, but it's YOU so I'll take it! *Happy dance.* Does this mean Trinity may be continued?!

Back to THIS fic--- It's well written, as expected. Nice story developing here and I'm interested in reading more. ^.^ Welcome back!