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for Some weird story

by DaakuDatenshi

schedule October 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The characters were so OOC its unreal. This story seemed rushed and didnt flow all too well. You have a few spelling errors too. I wish you would space the dialogue out so its easier to read. Im sure youll become a better writer, just work at it a bit harder.

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