heero and relena\'s romantic night

People this is my first time writing a fan fiction please tell me how I did.
Thank you.

Heero just came from a battle as he takes of his helmet he takes a deep breath of fresh air.
As he goes to his station where he works he sees duo, and excitingly Duo yells
“HEERO!” “I think that was the most fun ever.” Heero looks at him and in his dark eyes and said “Im glad you had fun duo...” duo looks at Heero and says “are you ok?” Heero replied “yeah just fine.” Duo then says with a whisper like voice “ok good…because you know if something’s bothering you, you can always tell we are best buds” Heero look at duo in disbelief of what he just herd his friend say and says “ I KNOW! Im sorry for shouting but I know, but duo everything is alright.” “Ok, ok” duo slimes nicely in reply “oh and Heero…” “Yes duo” “Relena’s here” “for fuck sakes what dose she want now!” “Don’t know just go see her” Heero take a deep breath and says “fine”. As Heero walks in to his station he thinks to him self what would relena want with me, what dose she want to talk about? I really don’t want to deal with her we are on a “brake”. As Heero looks up he sees relena on his bed and she says “hello hansom...” Heero looks at her with a smirk on his face and says “what do you want!?” “Oh…nothing” relena replies trying her hardest to be sexy. “Im not to sure I can trust you relena” Heero says with a stern voice. “don’t be mad at me im trying to talk to you” “ why because you miss your sex life witch by the way you sucked at” “I did not” “you don’t think so because you’re the queen and in your eye’s queens are always perfect…yeah right” “that’s not at all how I think” “what ever” “stop being so mean” “im not being mean im just telling you the truth and my truth is what everyone else it to chicken shit to tell you” “stop it!” as relena says that she starts to cry and falls into heero’s pillow. As Heero sees his love crying he walks over to her and starts to comforts her. “Oh Heero!” relena whimpers into his ear “I’ve missed you so much” “really?” Heero says in disbelief “yes! Vary much so!” Heero and relena talk for hours about there relationship getting more convertible with each other till it was pitch dark. Then relena says to Heero in a whisper “Heero I’ve missed you please can we show each other how much we love each other?” “I don’t know relena” “but Heero we have been talking for hours!” “Fine”. Just then relena jumps on Heero and starts un buttoning his shirt with her teeth. As relena’s doing that Heero starts to take relena’s skirt off. Relena runs her fingers up and down Heero’s chest, as she’s doing that Heero feels something coming up from his pants he new what it was, it was an erection. It felt like heaven to him. Relena felt it to on her thong and she new it was Heero. Just then Heero starts to take off relena’s shirt and bra and starts corseting her breasts. As Heero did that relena feels a shot of excitement and goes down and rips off heero’s pants and starts to give Heero a blow job. As relena’s giving Heero a blow job he starts to whimper in as relena got better Heero got louder. As Heero and relena start to show there “affection” Heero looks at the bobbing head of relena and says “I was wrong you’re amazing” relena replies out of breath “I told you”. “Im sorry I ever doubted you” Heero said “that’s ok” relena replies. The next day after Heero and relena had great sex Heero come out of his room in an amazing mood. Quatre looks at Heero in amazement and says “h-Heero? Are you alright? Are you coming down with something?” Heero swings over to quatre and says “yes quatre I am im coming down with love!” trowa turns right around and say “either Heero has taken drugs or he had sex with relena or better yet a donut” as trowa says that quatre busts out laughing and falls on the floor. Heero tunes to trowa and says “for your information it was the second one and she’s way better then a donut!” “How do you know have you ever done a donut?” trowa replies. “Ug! That’s why you were a clown!” Heero replies. “Ok” said trowa. Just then relena walks out and says “Heero I best be off do you want to take me home?” “Oh Heero take her home, take her home!” trowa says in automatic laughter after saying that. Heero tunes and glares at trowa and then turns back to relena and says “ok, just let me grab my jacket.” “Ok Hun” then Heero grabbed his jacket and then her looked at the to gundam pilots laughing and just glared then shut the door. Just then trowa got up and said “let me grab my jacket”. Then quatre said “Ok Hun” then the both fell on the floor laughing. The end.

Im sorry if it not the best please tell me what I did wrong thank you.